A gush of gentle breeze,
The sound of rustling leaves;
Smell of the first rain,
Embrace from your mother which eased the pain;
The ringing of the school bell,
Awaiting results, praying you’d do well;
A lecture missed,
A stolen kiss;
The first day ever spent with your beloved,
Now when you look back, find your emotions flooded;
The joy of finding a ten rupee note in the pocket of your old jeans,
Faking being upset when your friends spilt the beans;
The never-ending talks, those midnight calls,
Holding on to the phone till morning crawled;
The last day of college, bidding adieu holding sobs,
The nervousness at the first day of that new job;
An encouraging pat, a meaningful chat,
The look of assurance and belief from your dad;
A warm smile from a stranger,
The thrill of narrowly escaping danger;
Walking past a shop hearing your favourite song play,
Holding on to a cup of hot tea on a rainy day;
A short two-min call from your loved one,
After a cold day, a glimpse of the sun;
The feeling of warmth from someone you love,
The withering away of tensions from a child’s hug;
Realising life is not about that one big night or day,
It is these moments which take your breath away!
I thought a lot after reading this; and it’s been a long time that I had such thoughts.
Thanks You.
when i wrote it, i felt the same thing that its been ages ive indulged in these wonderful things. am happy that you connected to it too.
good luck and thanks for your thoughts.
Absolutely wonderful reminiscent poem!
You’re generous. Thank you.
Beautifully written! Kudos.
thank you for your appreciation. it is encouraging.
Thank you so much for really nice blog well done
Lovely piece! Lots of great imagery. 🙂
Thanks for stopping by my site. I appreciate it!
hey carrie,
its heartening when people can associate with you and your thoughts…am happy you liked the post…
it was a pleasure reading your work…thanks!
hey!!
beautifully written! actually reflecting the moments of the life!!
i enjoyed it!! keep it up 🙂
hey..its always a pleasure to know when someone else appreciates your work..thank you so much…
loved your name…eternalcadence’…has a very calming sound to it…
What I like about your poem is the sounds – rustling leaves, gentle breeze, a bell, the talking, sobs, joy, favourite song, rain; these give your piece great resonance, even harmony. Very well done.
May I suggest that you avoid cliché in poetry – ‘bidding adieu’, rainy day’, ‘moments that take your breath away’ and ‘narrowly escaping danger’. Your phraseology is otherwise excellent so trust yourself to develop the expression needed in these instances – your poem will become truly personal and your unique voice will emerge. Good luck 🙂
dear mike,
thank you so much for taking out the time to read and assess. it is extremely kind of you to offer help to an amateur, (two-bit) aspirant writer. i have noted your suggestions and will keep them in mind. this is truly encouraging.
moodsnmoments
Nostalgia unlimited!! A truly beautiful poetry, especially “the never-ending talks, those midnight calls, holding on to the phone till morning crawled” because that is what we three (best friends) did 🙂
i agree…nostalgia yielded to yearning to bring back those days…but all i get are these memories and many smiles with them 🙂
am so happy you relived them too
Yes I did..thank you 🙂